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I am from Warwick Rhode Island, and I have practiced Real Estate (sales & rentals) for the same company for 20 years. I came to Bermuda for a holiday and met my Bermudaful husband Andrew “Chester” Sheen. I now have been practicing here since 2009 and very happy to own my small, client-tailored business since 2013. I truly give personal & knowledgeable service.

I am extremely passionate about real estate. Nothing gives me more joy than being able to make and save money for my clients. Always providing proper representation and truly listening to their wants and needs. Earning their trust and confidence is of the utmost importance to me.

As you will see there are initials after my name: GRI, “Graduate of the Real Estate Institute”. CRS, “Certified Residential Specialist” CBR, “Certified Buyers Representative” and my newest designation "ABR" Accredited Buyers Representative. I always believed that education is the key to providing the best possible professional service for my clients. Educating my clients is extremely important, as I continually add value to my services.

My affiliations include a Proud member of (NAR) the National Association of Realtors (1988), International Association of Realtors (2009) and Bermuda Chamber of Commerce (2009). I serve on the following Committees: Executive Real Estate division of the Chamber of Commerce, Ethics, Banking & Real Estate handbook. Previous Committees: Membership & Rentals. Volunteered: Chamber Golf every year, PGA & Americas Cup.

I am here to assist you in any of your Real Estate needs!

Thank you for taking the time to visit my site and I look forward to working with you!

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  1. Refine the introduction to make it more professional, such as "Allow me to introduce myself, I am a seasoned real estate agent with 20 years of experience in sales and rentals, currently operating in Warwick, Rhode Island and Bermuda."
  2. Re-phrase the sentence "I came to Bermuda for a holiday and met my Bermudaful husband Andrew “Chester” Sheen" to "I relocated to Bermuda after meeting my husband, Andrew 'Chester' Sheen, and have been practicing real estate here since 2009."
  3. Change "I truly give personal & knowledgeable service." to "I am dedicated to providing personalized and knowledgeable service to my clients."
  4. Refine the sentence "Nothing gives me more joy than being able to make and save money for my clients." to "My passion for real estate is driven by the satisfaction of helping my clients maximize their investment."
  5. Re-word the sentence "Educating my clients is extremely important, as I continually add value to my services." to "I believe in the importance of educating my clients and continuously adding value to my services to enhance their experience."
  6. Change "I serve on the following Committees: Executive Real Estate division of the Chamber of Commerce, Ethics, Banking & Real Estate handbook." to "I actively serve on several committees, including the Executive Real Estate division of the Chamber of Commerce, Ethics, and Banking & Real Estate handbook."
  7. Refine the conclusion to be more inviting, such as "Thank you for taking the time to visit my site and I would be honored to assist you with any of your real estate needs. I look forward to working with you soon!"

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Allow me to introduce myself, I am a seasoned real estate agent with 20 years of experience in sales and rentals, currently operating in Warwick, Rhode Island and Bermuda. I relocated to Bermuda after meeting my husband, Andrew 'Chester' Sheen, and have been practicing real estate here since 2009. As the owner of a small, client-tailored business, I am dedicated to providing personalized and knowledgeable service to my clients.

My passion for real estate is driven by the satisfaction of helping my clients maximize their investment. I believe in the importance of educating my clients and continuously adding value to my services to enhance their experience. As a Graduate of the Real Estate Institute (GRI), Certified Residential Specialist (CRS), Certified Buyers Representative (CBR), and Accredited Buyers Representative (ABR), I am committed to providing the best possible professional service.

I am a proud member of the National Association of Realtors (1988), International Association of Realtors (2009), and Bermuda Chamber of Commerce (2009). I actively serve on several committees, including the Executive Real Estate division of the Chamber of Commerce, Ethics, and Banking & Real Estate handbook. I am also a regular volunteer for events such as the Chamber Golf and PGA & Americas Cup.

Thank you for taking the time to visit my site and I would be honored to assist you with any of your real estate needs. I look forward to working with you soon!